Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays all

population

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populations

in the world worry about the environmental problem which is discussed by

International environmental organization

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the International environmental organization

Surely

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Sure

, it plays a

biggest

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bigger

role than small establishments because its aim is to protect,

analyze

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

analyse

and control the environment,

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it gives all the powerful instruction to subsidiaries, which located

allover

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all over

the world. Describing the environmental situation and who have to be responsible

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for

the important matter with nature, on my opinion should be governmental. So I agree with

this

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statement a great extent.

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, the most powerful authority in all countries has

government

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a government

which mission is to control, organize and hold, that's why it has

ascendancy

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ascended

to stop overall spoiling the nature

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introduction new environmental programs and especially strict low.

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, low about regulation, penalty and

disposal toxic

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disposal, toxic

waste from factories and manufactories. I think,

less amount

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least amount

of toxic emissions towards will afford positive results.

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such

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county as Denmark holds a lot of penalties for factories acceding to the article which I has been

regarding

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regarded

some years ago.

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ministry

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the ministry

could implant programs about

vide

the visible part of a television transmission

video

opportunity according

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opportunity, according

recycling trash, transport reduction, development and installation more new actions than in the past.

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, the bio canal in China informed about an appearance whales near the Changshan Islands that oceanographers have been

sighting

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sighted

near 100 years ago.

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, the scientists explained

this

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fact

with

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changing the environmental state

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the area that was coursed of a special governmental program.

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, the people use just electronic or solar paneled transport.

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, the following all the rules have to be executed by people because the

hole

all of something including all its component elements or parts

whole

situation depends personally from everyone. Taking everything into consideration, to my mind government

have

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has

all the

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all, the

majority to solve all the actions about air, water, soil pollution and of

course to pay attention

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course pay attention

such

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problems as global warming, ozone layer destruction. My own view on the matter is to

fallow

to travel behind, go after, come after

all the rules and environmental positive

changers

an event that occurs when something passes from one state or phase to another

changes

will be noticed.

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Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In spite of the advances made in argiculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree

Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today, to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?