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In the future, the main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people now do most of their shopping online or in large supermarkets. Many small, family-run shops do not have enough customers to survive. Some people believe that
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, my view is that there will always be a place for smaller shops. There are many disadvantages to shopping online. Sometimes you have to wait for delivery for several days and sometimes the goods are not what you want. I often have to return clothes and other items because the size or colour is wrong for me. Supermarkets, too, have their drawbacks. The goods are
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 the same everywhere.
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, if you buy a coat from a supermarket, you will probably meet other people with exactly the same one. Small, independent shops are more interesting places to shop. You can find unique items which other people will admire. I have a friend who collects antiques, and he finds them in local shops, not supermarkets or web sites. Some small shops specialise in one area, which is very useful.
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, in music shops, the staff is very knowledgeable about music and instruments. You can get advice about what to buy.
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, small, local shops give character to a town. In my parents' village there are a few shops selling boating equipment, which suits the place as it is near the sea. I strongly believe that there will always be a place for small shops.
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, the owners will need to make sure they sell different things from the supermarkets and keep their shops interesting.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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