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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both the views and discuss your opinion.

#people #success #teacher #attitude #students
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Success in academics, according to some shrewd, relies on excellent tutors, whereas, other think it depends on
student's motive
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the student's motive
 toward studies, become
contentious issue
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a contentious issue
 nowadays. I will discuss both the views in the upcoming paragraphs with my opinion. To commence
with, proponents of
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, with proponents of
 the importance of teachers think that instructor play fundamental role in the success of their students because pupils can learn easily anything from them. If tutors have incredible skills regarding
teaching
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teaching, then
then
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 every student can grasp knowledge easily and can get higher scores.
Furthermore
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, most of the time children spend in schools so, it is the major responsibility of
teacher
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the teacher
teachers
a teacher
 to provide good education to their students.
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, a generous tutor
know
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knows
 the capabilities of their
tutees
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
duties
 because he can analyse them on the basis of their performance. On the other side, student's attitude
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 plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
 because devotion is important for every task, it
help
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helps
 them to remain on a goal and help to achieve that success.
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, motivation is necessary in every field so if
students attitude
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students' attitudes
students' attitude
the students' attitude
student's attitude
 towards study is not good
then
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 no one can motivate them even good teachers
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.
For example
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, a survey done by US reveals that topper of one university
have paid
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has paid
 full devotion by themselves and get regular motivation helps them to get higher scores,
hence
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, mischievous students are incapable to get flying colours in results. In my opinion, good tutors and
students
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students'
student's
 attitude, both have the imperative role to get success in education. In conclusion, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that teachers should provide good education to the students who are serious
for
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in
about
 their studies and motivate others to build their future.
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