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The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over the period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over the period of 15 years
#amount #waste #three #companies #period #years
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 graph below
demonstrate
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 information about the number of
waste
 produced by three different companies during the 15 years.
Overall
,
company
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companies
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 A and B had sharply
decreasing
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decreased
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 from 2000 to 2015,
however
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company
 C had significantly
growing
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 in these years.
It is clear that
, the amount of
waste
 in
first
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the first
a first
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company
 an enormous decline from the pick point which
consist
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12
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of 12
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tonne
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 over the period.
On the other hand
,
second
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the second
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 B
company
 had been shown a substantial climb between 2000 and 2005, but
next
one
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decade the level of
waste
 in
this
company
 dramatically
diped
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dropped
 to
the
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a
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 weak point. As regards the C
company
,
a
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 dramatic quality of
waste
 steeply increased from 4 to 10 tonnes,
however
 despite greater protection of
waste
,
third
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company
 was not as popular as others.
In addition
, another interesting point is that
,
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 C
company
's trend had been crossed with B in 2010 and A in 2012
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste production
  • company
  • trends
  • significant
  • fluctuations
  • surges
  • reductions
  • correlations
  • environmental policies
  • technological advancements
  • units of measurement
  • time period
  • stability
  • milestones
  • graph analysis
  • pattern recognition
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