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Some people claim that children should be taught how to handle money and finances at school. Others, however, think that it should be a matter for families and not education. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words

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When considering
school
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 curriculum, people are still divided about whether
money
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management
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 should be taught or not because it is not education’s responsibility. While there are benefits for the disapproving opinion, I would argue that it is better to let children
finacially
from a financial point of view
financially
 navigate their real world. The viewpoint that parents’ teaching children how to handle
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 and finances in lieu of
school
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 is understandable for several reasons.
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, it is obvious that many young people lack the experience to control their own finances, so their families would be an ideal model for them learn and imitate.
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, it is crucial that parents use financial problems and tight budgets to address finances and to teach children how to manage their
money
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 at the dinner table. Teenage children will
also
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 earn a weekly or monthly allowance in budget preparation.
Secondly
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,
school
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 curriculum are plenty of academic subjects which requires strenuous effort and full- time concentration;
therefore
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, it is unnecessary for teachers at
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 to teach students the right way to control the budgets.
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, skills for
money
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management
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 seems to be overlooked if it is added to the current study program which focus on main courses
such
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 as math, literature and English.
Although
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 it is a valid point,
on the other hand
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, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to be acknowledged of financial orientation at
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 because the following rationales.
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, children will possibly learn the meaning of financial responsibility through the integrated lessons.
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, moral subject, there are stories that mention characters with
insatiable appetite
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an insatiable appetite
 for
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, in
this
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 way, students can earn the life lesson and reflect
themselves
objective case of they
them
 to behave well. Or, math period is a case
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at
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 point, they are taught to calculate their
money
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 and use it appropriately.
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,
money
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management
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 should be taught at
school
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 as opposed to at home, because
today
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today's
 parents are not assured in their ability to teach financial literacy to their children. Many parents themselves haven't ever learned important financial values much less to teach children how to use their budget properly; to make the matter worse, bad financial habits may be passed on to their children.
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, learning
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management
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 at
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 is methodically built so that it is more reliable for students to acquire and to be able to adapt into the real life. For the aforementioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in the future if they are taught they way to handle
money
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 and financial at
school
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 rather than in the family.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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