The crime rate has been increasing these days. Even if they are punished, they still commit the crime as soon as they get out of the prison. i think there can many any reasons for them to do crime again. In this the our government as well as society plays a major role and have a responsibility to solve this Problem.
There are many different reasons which encourage them to commit
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violations
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lack
of job opportunities and community status. Most Correct article usage
a lack
of
people who have a criminal history lack sufficient trust. Finding a former criminal as a cashier, Change preposition
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for example
, is the
truly scarce. Change the article
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Criminal
background can decrease Correct article usage
A criminal
the
job Correct article usage
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opportunity
as employers need Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
the
workers without any criminal Correct article usage
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record
. Not only Fix the agreement mistake
records
this
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does this
effect
them financially it Correct your spelling
affect
also
affects them emotionally as some time
even Replace the word
sometimes
there
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their
family's
don't accept them back which make them lonely and homeless. They are Change noun form
family
all ways
suspected by their community Correct your spelling
always
and
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which
treat
them with suspicion. All Correct subject-verb agreement
treats
this
can lead to holes and directly or indirectly influence them to commit violence. However
, this
can change
by government intervention and Wrong verb form
be changed
change
in Correct article usage
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society's
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the
life problems and how they can overcome Correct article usage
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it
.The government should Correct pronoun usage
them
prove
schemes that provide financial assistance and train them in useful jobs. As Verb problem
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a society Change preposition
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also
should
change their mindset and give Remove a modal verb
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opportune
and support them to become more responsible. Replace the word
opportunities
To conclude
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reasons
crime
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opinion
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opinion,
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government and society should take responsibility to Correct determiner usage
the
rehabitied
the ex-criminals so as to prevent them Correct your spelling
rehabilitate
to commit
future Change preposition
from committing
crime
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite