The crime rate has been increasing these days. Even if they are punished, they still commit the crime as soon as they get out of the prison. i think there can many any reasons for them to do crime again. In this the our government as well as society plays a major role and have a responsibility to solve this Problem.

There are many different reasons which encourage them to commit
violation
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again
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one can be
lack
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of job opportunities and community status. Most
of
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people who have a criminal history lack sufficient trust. Finding a former criminal as a cashier,
for example
, is
the
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truly scarce.
Criminal
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background can decrease
the
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job
opportunity
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opportunities
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as employers need
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workers without any criminal
record
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. Not only
this
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effect
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them financially it
also
affects them emotionally as
some time
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even
there
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their
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family's
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don't accept them back which make them lonely and homeless. They are
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suspected by their community
and
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treat
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them with suspicion. All
this
can lead to holes and directly or indirectly influence them to commit violence.
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,
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by government intervention and
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in
society
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outlook towards these culprits. In jail, they should be educated and teach them how to tackle
with
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the
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life problems and how they can overcome
it
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them
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.The government should
prove
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schemes that provide financial assistance and train them in useful jobs. As
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as
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a society
also
should
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change their mindset and give
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and support them to become more responsible.
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there
were
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different
reason
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reasons
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which can motivate them to commit
crime
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crimes
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again, in my
opinion
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that
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government and society should take responsibility to
rehabitied
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rehabilitate
the ex-criminals so as to prevent them
to commit
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from committing
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future
crime
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crimes
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.
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