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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days,
people
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's
reviews
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 of products and services are available on the internet to help
others
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. Some
people
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 think
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 is negative, I believe,
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, that it is beneficial
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 essay, both views will be discussed. On the one hand, online opinions make
people
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 waste less
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 on trial and error. Obstetricians,
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, get ranked by their patients
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therefore
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, a pregnant woman just checks online
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 and chooses where and by whom she wants to be attended without having to go to different consultants. The second positive point is that it can prevent
others
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 from making the same mistake, and
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, money will
also
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 be saved.
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, when ordering food for delivery, one can see ahead the
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 of
others
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, not only about the taste, but
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 about the quality-price ratio, the
time
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 it takes to arrive home and the packaging of the product.
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, there is no filter to these opinions, so anyone can comment on services and lie about them
, many
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. Many
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 companies write their own
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 and mislead their customers to increase
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sales. In like manner, many web pages have written or video testimonials
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 make
people
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 buy goods that do not work as they should.
Others
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, in like manner, write to harm their competitors,
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 as some hotels that write bad comments to decrease the bookings of their nearby hostels and bed and breakfast inns. In conclusion,
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 many companies lie in their
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, one can usually
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 when that happens and dismiss that opinion
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 I certainly think that online comments and rankings are a good thing. Knowing in advance the public opinion on a product, service, restaurant
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 even doctors can make your choice less
time
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-consuming, more accurate and money-saving
that
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than
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 trying everything for the first
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 every
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task
Make a clear view in the intro and restate it in the end. Plan what you will say before you write.
coherence
Put one big idea in each paragraph. Start with the main idea and add a small detail.
content
Give more exact examples that fit the topic. Some examples here make the point hard to see.
language
Check small grammar and use simple words to show order and link ideas.
structure
The essay shows a clear view and has a plan with intro and ending.
coherence
It uses when and otherwise well to show contrasts.
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