Success is often measured by wealth and other material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

wealth
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Wealth
is one of the
factor
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factors
to lead a good and sustainable
life but
Accept comma addition
life, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
wont
will not
won't
want
agree with
statement
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the statement
that
wealth
and other material belongings are
only measure
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the only measure
of success.
even
used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
Even
there are things that
dfines
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define
defines
a success of
person
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a person
people
,
lets
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let's
see in
further
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one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraphs
.
firstly
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Firstly
,
this
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give an exhibition of to an interested audience
present
world
runing
(American football) a play in which a player attempts to carry the ball through or past the opposing team
running
ruining
across
wealth
Suggestion
the wealth
a wealth
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
many
beliving
the cognitive process that leads to convictions
believing
that
wealth
gets status in society.
this
Suggestion
This
meantality
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mentality
of
makes
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making
people greedy and jealous, and
thsi
denotes a person or thing
this
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a good sign
for
socaity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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