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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/
Madame
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, I am writing to you, for requesting
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 of my accommodation. Currently, I live in
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room
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 G-36 which is shared by another girl student. I am finding it extremely difficult to study in the
room
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. It is because
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 I have been used to work or study in isolated environments from my childhood. I am more productive when I am working alone. On top of it, the student
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 I share the
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 is loud and always gets her friends to the place.
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, the student hangs her clothes around generating a damp smell and, disturbing the serenity. I request you to change my accommodation to a non-shareable
room
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. It would greatly help me to study and excel in my academics. I hope you accept my request. Looking forward to
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 from you. Yours faithfully, Sashank Alladi
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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