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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of different six
language
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 groups
except
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 English
of
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British
students
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 at a university in England, in 200 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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students
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 tended to speak other languages rather than English in 2010 more developed 2000.
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, the most popular
language
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 was Spain and the least popular was French in both years. The
percentage
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 of
students
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 who speak French in 2000 was lower than
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 by 5%. The proportion of
students
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 who speak Germany in 2000 and 2010
were
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 the same
to
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 10%. Spain was the kind of
language
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 with the highest
percentage
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 to 35% in 2000, and it was higher than the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who speak Spain by 5%. The proportion of
students
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 who speak no other
language
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 in 2000 to 20%, and the figure in 2010 to 10%. The
percentage
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 of
students
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 who another
language
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 in 2010 was higher than in 2000 at 5%, and the proportion of
students
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 speak two languages in 2010 and 2000 years
also
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 share
about
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the same trend
to
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 10% and 15%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, language, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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