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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.
The graph shows how the populations of
India
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 and
China
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 have changed since 2000 and how they will change in the future. In 2000, there more people were living in
China
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 than in
India
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. The number of Chinese was 1.25
billion
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,
while
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India
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's
population
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 was about 1
billion
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. Between 2000 and 2010, there has been a 0.2
billion
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 rise in the number of Indian citizens. Over the same period,
China
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's
population
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 has increased by 0.1
billion
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 to reach over 1.35
billion
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.
According to
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 the graph, the
population
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 in
India
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 will increase more quickly than in
China
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, and experts say that by 2030, both countries will have the same
population
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 of 1.45
billion
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.
After
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this
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,
China
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's
population
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 is likely to fall slightly to 1.4
billion
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 in 2050,
while
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India
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's
population
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 will probably increase and reach 1.6
billion
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.
Thus
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, over the 50 years,
India
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 is going to experience steady growth in its
population
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 and it will overtake
China
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.
On the other hand
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,
China
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's
population
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 will peak in 2030 and
then
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 begin to fall.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, billion, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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