The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.
The line graph illustrates
that
the amount of Correct word choice
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coffee
was
sent abroad by Unnecessary verb
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Brazil
, Colombia and Costa
Rica
between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity since the very beginning.
In the
2002, the exported Change the article
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coffee
in the
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Brazil
, Colombia and Costa
Rica
was respectively 15, nearly 13 and 5 million
kilograms
. Although
the
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Brazil
and Costa
Rica
rose their freight gradually to over 10 and 15million
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15 million
kilograms
between 2002 and 2006, the
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Costa
Rica
lost trade volume that
is
reached roughly 7-8 Unnecessary verb
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million
kilograms
. The following 2008, the
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Costa
Rica
increased rapidly with a
little Correct article usage
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fluctuate
and reached Replace the word
fluctuation
to
20 Change preposition
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million
kilograms
. Moreover
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,Moreover
the
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Brazil
draw a
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fluctuate
which Replace the word
fluctuation
were
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droped
between 2008 and 2010, but Correct your spelling
dropped
finally
there was reached the highest capacity of Add a comma
,finally
the
trade which is 25 Correct article usage
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million
kilograms
in the
2012. Change the article
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In contrast
, the export of Colombian coffee
decreased by 2008, afterward, there was
rose Unnecessary verb
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15
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by 15
million
kilograms
.
In the essence, the consumption of the
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coffee
was fluctuated
down and up, but Change to the active voice
fluctuated
has fluctuated
the
all of them increased significantly.Correct article usage
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, costa, rica, million, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 3 times.
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