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The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.
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The line graph illustrates
that
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the amount of
coffee
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was
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sent abroad by
Brazil
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, Colombia and
Costa
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Rica
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 between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity since the very beginning. In
the
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2002, the exported
coffee
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 in
the
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Brazil
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, Colombia and
Costa
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Rica
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 was respectively 15, nearly 13 and 5
million
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kilograms
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.
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Brazil
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 and
Costa
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Rica
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 rose their freight gradually to over 10 and
15million
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15 million
kilograms
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 between 2002 and 2006,
the
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Costa
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Rica
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 lost trade volume
that
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reached roughly 7-8
million
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kilograms
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. The following 2008,
the
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Costa
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Rica
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 increased rapidly with
a
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little
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 and reached
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20
million
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kilograms
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.
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Moreover
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the
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Brazil
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 draw
a
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fluctuate
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 which
were
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droped
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dropped
 between 2008 and 2010, but
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finally
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 there was reached the highest capacity of
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trade which is 25
million
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kilograms
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 in
the
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2012.
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, the export of Colombian
coffee
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 decreased by 2008, afterward, there
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rose
15
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by 15
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million
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kilograms
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. In the essence, the consumption of
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coffee
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was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 down and up, but
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all of them increased significantly.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, costa, rica, million, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Illustrates
  • Amount
  • Exported
  • Abroad
  • Capacity
  • Trends
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Significant
  • Peaks
  • Troughs
  • Reasons
  • Climate
  • Demand
  • Trade policies
  • Compare and contrast
  • Fluctuations
  • Economic conditions
  • Agricultural developments
  • Unique elements
  • Production scale
  • Market strategy
  • Global coffee demand
  • Agricultural technology
  • International trade agreements
  • Competitiveness
  • Quality
  • Reputation
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