The bar chart illustrated the salt intake in six different-age groups in two genders in the USA in 2000.
The bar chart illustrated the
salt
intake in six different-age
groups Correct your spelling
different age
in
two genders in the USA in 2000.
As Change preposition
of
it
can be Correct pronoun usage
apply
seeb
, the boys under 6 Correct your spelling
seen
years
old consumed about 2000mg of salts daily, 500 mg
lower than the recommended level
. However
, consume
of salts dramatically increased as the boys grew, with 3500mg by the group aged 6-11 Replace the word
consumption
years
old and about 4300 mg
by the group aged 12 -19 years
old. The figure peaked at 4500mg by the adults aged 30-39 years
old, about one time higher than the recommended level
and then
dropped gradually. However
, the seniors over 60 years
old still consumed about 3500mg, 1000mg higher than the recommended level
.
The female
Americans consumed less Correct article usage
Female
salt
. The figures presented a steady trend in the middle four groups (6-11 years
old, 12-19 years
old, 39-40 years
old and 40-60 years
old) with about 2750mg. The females over 60 years
old consumed the exact amount of salt
recommended. Girls under 6 years
old only ate around 1800mg daily.
Overall
, except the
group of children under 6 Change preposition
for the
years
old, Americans in the rest of five
groups had consumed Correct article usage
the five
the
Correct article usage
an
amount
of salts higher than the Change the quantifier
number
level
recommended. They were fond of salty food. Males ate more salt
than females, especially in the
adulthood between 20- 39 Correct article usage
apply
years
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