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Q: Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Every year a considerable number of minority languages disappear and lose their function to connect people in different nations. In my opinion,
although
 the existence of
fewer
Suggestion
the few
 languages would lead to more convenient communication globally, the detrimental impact of
this
 condition on cultural heritage and diversity
can not
can not
cannot
 be neglected. On the one hand, if there are a limited number of languages spoken around the world, people would communicate with more people from a wider range of nations. In fact, people will not be forced to learn various languages to become able to expand their relationships.
This
 situation can be exemplified by the English
language
, as nowadays it is the most common
language
 in many regions and used in different fields as a standard
language
.
Therefore
, the domination of
fewer
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the few
 languages will contribute to establishing economical, political and social relationships in an easier way.
However
, the deterioration of minority languages would harm culture severely.
Language
 is a humans’ prominent and powerful tool connecting them to their history and traditions. If one
language
 in a nation dies out, it would be pretty impossible for the
next
 generations in that region to understand and conserve their cultural heritage and customs related to that
language
.
In addition
, the diversity of languages has been one of the sources of various thoughts, ideas, and experiences in different cultures.
Words
Suggestion
The words
 of each
language
 represent the perception of its speaker from the world.
Hence
, as a
language
disappear
Suggestion
disappears
 people would no more be able to experience the excitement of living in that different culture. To conclude, it seems that the domination of
major languages
Suggestion
the major languages
 on less speaking ones is an inevitable consequence of globalization.
However
, we need to be more concerned about dying out languages due to preserving their precious cultural heritage and diversity.
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