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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.
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The line graph shows how
car
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 ownership in the UK changed between 1975 and 2005.
Overall
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, the proportion of
people
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 who owned two or three cars rose
while
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 the figure for those who owned no
car
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 declined.
Additionally
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, having
one
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car
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 was the most common situation during the period shown. In 1975, nearly half of the UK population had
one
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car
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while
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people
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 with no
car
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 took up a smaller
percentage
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, at roughly 43%. These figures both declined over the following ten
years
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, to around 37% for
people
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 having
one
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car
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 and 25% for those with no
car
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. The
percentage
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 of those who owned 2 or 3 cars was approximately 7% and 3% respectively in 1975, and both experienced increases over the
next
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 10
years
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 to around 13% and 5% respectively. Over the
next
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 20
years
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, the
percentage
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 of those with
one
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car
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 gradually rose back up to 45%
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 of those with no
car
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 continued to decline to about 22%.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
people
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 having 2 or 3 cars continued to rise over the following 20
years
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 to 19% and 9% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people, one, percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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