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The chart below shows the changes in the price of a litre of milk at three different supermarkets between 2010 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in the price of a litre of milk at three different supermarkets between 2010 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic indicates how the cost of a litre of milk has fluctuated between
three
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 Different supermarkets in four years, from 2010 to 2014. In general, during the first
three
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years
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 prices
has
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 gradually grown, ending up With a slight decrease
the
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last
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 year. (..For all
three
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 supermarkets) From 2010 to 2011 prices stayed more or less the same (Slight increase),
however
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 (There
is
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 a noticeable
ju
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decrease
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 again. Sign in / Sign up mp..) We can notice that the biggest jump happened (occurred?) Just one year later between 2011 and 2012
when
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the
value
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 of milk rose significantly in two (out) of (the)
three
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 Superstores(Rose significantly for both super goods and buy cheap,
whereas
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value
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 store...), except for
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 store which kept it stable. In fact (
Value
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 store ), from being the
more
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most
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 expensive in 2010
it
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became (
to
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) the cheapest in 2014. Super goods, unlike its
competitor
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competitor,
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was
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 the most convenient (Conveniently priced) at the beginning,
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however
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 it has revealed to be the
more
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most
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 expensive
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 of the statistics Analysis (most expensive by 2014.. )
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, it is the one which raised the price the most, around 12 British pence a litre in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, essay, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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