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I want to talk about the
competition
 I attended when I was in high school. It was a
competition
 about literature. I was nominated by my literature teacher because I was good at it. At the beginning of the
competition
, I felt stressful because a number of people were watching us, included my literature teacher, and I didn't want my teacher
feel
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to feel
 disappointed. At
first
, questions were easy, but they were getting harder. At the end, I was able to complete the
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
 with a success. I came
first
 in the
competition
 within a hair's breadth. Some students are easy to lose interest, and a
competition
 is a good mean to draw students' attention
into
Suggestion
in
 the subject. Yes, if good students are rewarded, they are less likely to lose motivation, and they can keep studying at
same level
Suggestion
the same level
. I would say that
competition
 among students and especially among parents is now
more fiercely
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fiercer
 than it was once. Now, parents want their children to be almost perfect academically, and they push them hard.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 that the
competition
 is harder now. I think by doing intensive training a sport
person
 can improve him/herself rapidly.
On the other hand
, pushing a body hard in a short period of time can cause physical injuries, body harm. I think it depends on one's character. If one is motivated while in a
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
, I would say that
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compassion
computation
 is a positive for
this
person
, but if the opposite is true for another
person
, I wouldn't say that
competition
 could help that
person
. I think it is possible to become too competitive in a sport because a very good result is essential for some sport people, and they are likely to do whatever necessary to reach the result they are asking for.

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