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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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 of human beings, some assure that humans may well have by far the best convenience whilst others agree that it would get into deep trouble. It is personally agreed that the man will be able to achieve outstanding results with sophisticated AI.
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, the merits are to support that we should fund and let the proceeding actions of robotic modernization to forge ahead. Those opposing the idea of artificial development state that we have still a long way to get adjusted to
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