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"Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay"

#people #teacher
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It is certainly said that learning is an ongoing process
.
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.
Every person
learn
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learns
 something new according to their age, experience
knowledge
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 and education. According to my point of
view it
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view, it
 is always better to have a
teacher
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 or guide for study. One
teacher
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 has adequate
knowledge
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 to teach their
student
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students
. He knows all the possible ways to make
subject easier
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the subject easier
 for the students, even he teaches them in
effective manner
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an effective manner
.
For example
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, some students are weak in some
subjects but
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subjects, but
 a
teacher
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always guides
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has always guided
 them according to their mental capacity. He teaches them as fun. Some people can learn better in group by
discuss
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discussing
 the topics with others. In class people can know the other?
s
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S
 views, even they know how we can learn effectively. Where the
teacher
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always give
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always gives
 easy direction to learn. In the today?
s competitive world
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The S competitive world
S competitive world
,
everbody
all people
everybody
 is busy, some people think that rather to waste their time to go for classes they can learn better regarding their subject _. They can attend online classes by using
internet
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the internet
 at home. They can get relevant information from
internet
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the internet
 regarding their topic. There is not specific time, age limit to learn something new.
Some thing
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Something
 new which we always learn only with the experience
such
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 as
atequates
the historic period preceding the Middle Ages in Europe
antiquities
etiquette
,
knowledge
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, new habits and so on.
In
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To
 sum up, I would like to say that it is always better for the people to have
teacher
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 because one
teacher
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 has good
knowledge
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, experience and education to teach others. They can take
learn easy
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learn, easy
 from him rather by themselves.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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