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In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

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Learning a
second
language
 is compulsory in some places. While, it is volunteer in other places. I think foreign
language
play
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plays
has played
 a vital part of schooling because it has some advantages.
Firstly
, I think studying a foreign
language
 is a true decision for people who want to broaden their job opportunities. At present, there are a lot of foreign companies in Vietnam so knowing the
second
language
 is really necessary, especially for young people if they want a good salary. Foreign languages are mandatory in some companies, especially with manager positions.
Secondly
, our knowledge will be increasing thanks to foreign languages. We
also
 will be more confident in communicating with foreign people as well can study abroad without difficulties about the different languages.When we want to research
culture
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the culture
 about your
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 country, I believe that learn the
language
 which
this
 country is using will help you a lot.
Moreover
, the children can expand their relationships immediately as well as having a good social skill. Before, the children only focused on the
subject
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subject, such
such
 as math,
physical
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physics
,..
instead
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Instead
 of learning
second
language
. But now, due to understanding clearly about the
important
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importance
 of learning foreign languages, many schools choose
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
, Chinese,...
as
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As
a
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an
 office subject. They pay more attention about teaching quality, building facilities,...
to
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To
 make a studying environment as best as possible. In conclusion, foreign
language
 study is an important part of education. It is useful and necessary for better development as well as
broad
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broader
 job opportunities.

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