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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the majority of people believe that the losses of cover of planes and death of animals are a significant problem in whole the w
orld but,
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world, but
 some people are opponents that idea and they are proponents of the other important environmental issues.  In my opinion, extra that the
first
 theory I believe that, the global warming is the ultimate reason and causes of many issues which is lead to extinction and destruction of w
orld.
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the world
worlds
 Comparing with that two ideas, I can point that, these viewpoints relate to that.  The following essay will discuss both objectives t
hroughoutly.
 Primarily, destruction and deforestation are effect of live in the world of humanity and industrialization. In the
last
 50 decades, industry activities and modify lifestyle is a process of that important which the main one is global warming. So, considering to both views I can conclude these points cannot separate with that. Once I have compared with, the meld of ice in the south and north pole causes of white bears extinct and lead to increasing the surface level of water.
However
, the heat of climate (changing climate) is the one of the basic reasons for forest fires, which is due to the flooding in other sides of the earth.
Besides
, population is the
third
 reason of that which to conclude the immigration and emigration. In conclusion, the environmental trouble due to the many reasons which is significant global warming. Actually, these views are correct because these are included together, but as I said before, I believe that the global warming is an important cause of these issues., which is due to the flooding in other sides of the nature.
Besides
, population is the
third
 reasoning of that which to conclude the immigration and emigration. In conclusion, the environmental complication due to the many reasons which is significant global warming. Actually, these views are correct because these are included together, but as I said before, I believe that the global warming is an important cause of these issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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