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you have seen in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter . explain why you would like the job . give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ . say how yo would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing here because I saw your advertisement in the magazine for a person like me, who is interested to live with an Australian family short time. If you ask me about my
aiming
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 for the job, I have to express two things which motivated me about your offered position.
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 of all, the most important one, I am currently studying society and in the future
study-year
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 I will start writing my thesis about the difference between family cultures and their effects on the children's personality while they are growing up. The
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secondly
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 point is that I'm a
foreigner
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 student here and struggling with language after 3
semester
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studying
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in
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 University. All in all, my outgoing personality and great behaviour with children are positive things that always my friends said about me.
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 summer will be a great opportunity to take time with your family and experience more about your culture and traditions. best regards jenny

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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