The graph shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014 .

The graph shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014 .
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2011 to 2014 .
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by men increased
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by women increased significantly before
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by men in 2011,
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by
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in 2013 ,
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14,000 in 2014.
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but it declined slightly by 2,000 in 2014 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library
  • gender
  • reading habits
  • compare
  • significantly
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • consistent
  • fluctuate
  • period
  • summarise
  • graph
  • public library
  • books read
  • Burnaby Public Library
  • 2011 to 2014
  • male
  • female
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