it is important for children to learn the diffrence between right and wrong at an early age.punishment is necessery to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

it is generally accepted that,we humans are putting our whole effort to make
this
world
somewhere better for our children and the
next
generations and it is a huge responsibility on our sholders in
this
century between the wide range of right and wrong ways,trustable and untrustable persons because we are taking our
first
steps to become a highly educated generation in all fields and there are so many things that if we go through them unwisely we could lost our aim and purpose so it is our duty to teach our children the importance of making right decissions and the diffrences between wrong and proper from their young ages. It is inescapable that children are very sensitive and they are ready to catch the knowledge ball in their early ages.Their relationship with their parents in those years is like the mirror and its reflect.Our children are reflecting of our behaves and we have a huge impact on them both physically and mentally so we should be careful of what we do and what we say.Sooner or later they will grow up and be a substitute of us in
world
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the world
a world
and in their own family so
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
am somehow disagree
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punishment. We are feeding their mind so in my opinion, we can teach them everything
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the language of kindness.nothing can compare with the influance of being kindhearted and soft
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them i think if we ask them for something in a kind way they would accept it more easier than when we ask them with violence and anger but
first
we should teach them dicipline,intelligence,sacrifice and being kind and gentel with all the living thingsin the
world
to do not let them abuse our gentelness because whether we like it or not we are not the only one who have affect on our children and definitely they will capture so many behavioral and verbal habits from their friends, classmates and colleagues so we most make them ready to face all these things,kindly and from an enlightened standpoint.
however
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However
, we will need some kind of punishment in some cases, but I am 100 percent disagree with corporal punishment, we should prevent the currency of violence in
world
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the world
a world
so if we are really having a serious issue
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our children and we are suffering from that we can forbid watching television, playing games and etc. I think its a suitable policy. In conclusion, we should deal with our children deliberately
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expresses the means used
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no violence and anger.We should grow them up in a positive environment with a good vibe. We cannot teach them the difference between wrong and right with totally wrong behaviour.

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