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Last
 summer, my family went on a vacation to
Cat Ba island
Suggestion
the Cat BA island
Cat BA island
a Cat BA island
Cat BA islands
, which is located in Hai Phong city and I was really impressed with the
beach
 there. To arrive at
this
 destination, we had to take a ferry from the mainland, a journey which lasted roughly one hour. Fortunately, I was not seasick.When we reached there, to be honest, the scenery appealed to me a lot, especially the
beach
. The
beach
 itself was absolutely breathtaking and the crystal clear water seemed to stretch endlessly to the horizon.
In addition
, from a distance, huge waves were crashing onto the shore, which sounded like a melody.I was so excited that I just wanted to jump into the sea right away. On the
beach
, many people were enjoying the scenery, and some were swimming while their children were making
sandcastles
Suggestion
sand castles
.My family quickly checked into the hotel, we changed our clothes and joined the people there. Actually,
this
 vacation gave me the chance to relax and all my worries seemed to fall away.
Therefore
, I hope that we will be able to enjoy more holidays like
this
 every year.
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