In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?

In my opinion, an egalitarian community is one in which everyone has the same rights and the same
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. I compeleteşly agree that people can achieve more in
this
kind of society. Educations
is
Suggestion
are
an important factor with regard to
personeal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
personnel
personally
success
in life. I believe that all children should have access to free schooling, and higher education should be either free or affordable for all those who chose to pursue a university degree. In a society without free schooling or affordable higher education, only
childrenj
a young person of either sex
children
and young adults from wealthier families would have
acces
the right to enter
access
to the best learning
opportunitesd
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
, and they
wpould
past tense of "will"
would
therefore
be
bertter
(comparative of 'good') superior to another (of the same class or set or kind) in excellence or quality or desirability or suitability; more highly skilled than another
better
prepared for the
jov
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
job
market.
This
kind of inequality would ensure the
success
of
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
but harm the
orher
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
I would argue that equal rights and
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
are not in conflict with people's freedom to succeed or fail.
In other words
, equality does not mean that people lose their motivation to succeed,
ot
away from home
out
oath
or
that they are not allowed to fail.
On the contrary
, I believe that most people would feel more motivated to work hard and reach their potential if they thought that they lived in a fair society. Those who did not make the same effort would know that they had wasted their opportunity. Inequality,
on the other hand
, would be more
likelt
has a good chance of being the case or of coming about
likely
to
demotivate
people because they would know that the odds of
success
were low compared to those from
privilieged
blessed with privileges
privileged
families. In
conlusuion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, it
seem s
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
seems
to me that there is
apositive
Suggestion
a positive
relationship between equality and personal
success
.

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