Nowadays childrens watches a lot of TV and play video games. however, some people think that these activities are not good for a child mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children spend their leisure

time

with

program and play video games. In fact that some parents don't take care about

theirs

of them or themselves

their

child and some people believed that, it is not

for

Suggestion

good health

moreover

, they think how to overcome those activities because

program and video games are creating

lazyness

inactivity resulting from a dislike of work

laziness

among the

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

. In my point of view,

Although

this

technical

tools

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tool

help to children mental

development but

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development, but

this

is not

best way

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the best way

Firstly

, Video games and television channel to teach a lot of

information

to children. 70 percent children's easily understand all

kind

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kinds

of message and

this

is a correct age for children to learn and think their own. So children

interst

having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern

interested

to improve their skills through watching

shows and playing different games.

For example

, Children play Chess game through

computer

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a computer

channels during the

time

pupils learn a lot of

information

about that game.

Then

they are automatically thinking and do something without any other person help.

This

types

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type

activitie

any specific behavior

activities

activity

really helps to children mind development.

Nevertheless

Accept space

30 percent child only do,

This

activities

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activity

out of hundred percent, remaining 70%

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

waste their leisure

time

through

or play games.I have heard so many

times most

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times, most

of the

peoples

Suggestion

people

watching cartoon programs without taking any break.

For instance

, All

kind

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kinds

of Cartoon program only create laughing

activities but

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activities, but

it doesn't teach any good

information

to children. Already I mentioned above paragraph,

This

is a correct

time

to develop

theirs

of them or themselves

their

brain and thinking ability. So we have to teach good

information

only. In my opinion,

Eventhough

Suggestion

Even Though

and Game teach good

information

children but

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children, but

this

is not

best way

Suggestion

the best way

to develop their activities. There are

plathora

extreme excess

plethora

plethoras

of physical and mental activities. Parents should take effort to grow their

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

children's

perfect way

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a perfect way

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

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297 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays childrens watches a lot of TV and play video games. however, some people think that these activities are not good for a child mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages?

Today level of stress at the work place are increasing tremendously. What are the causes? what can the problem create?

In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

School Children should choose the subjects they study from a young age and stop doing subjects they find uninteresting.” How much do you agree with this opinion and why? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.