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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
table
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 shows the rates of household income
which
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apply
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spent
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were spent
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 on four items in five
Eouropian
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European
 countries.
Overall
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, what stands out from the
table
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 is that the level of housing is
dominant
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more dominant
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 than
others
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the others
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 in three of the countries(France, Germany and
UK
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the UK
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)
whereas
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 in Turkey and
Spain
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,Spain
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 people prefer to spend
the
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apply
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most of
the
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their
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 income
for
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on
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 food and drink. Looking at the
table
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 in more detail, in France and Germany the percentage of housing spending ranks first at around one-
third
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,
while
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 that of clothing
are
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is
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 the lowest share at 7% and 15% respectively. A similar pattern can be seen in
UK
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the UK
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, housing spending is observed
the
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as the
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 highest indicator at 37%,
while
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 the percentage of clothing and entertainment are the same at precisely 11%. In terms of
Turkey
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,Turkey
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 the figure for food and drink is the
second
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 highest in the
table
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 with 36 % which is approximately 4 times as high as the level of entertainment expenditure.
Finally
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, in
Spain
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,Spain
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 the indicator of food and drink spending is reported
31
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at 31
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%
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which
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that is
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 twice as much as the
rates
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rate
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 of entertainment spending

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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