Due to many young people dropping out from schools , the rate of unemployment is increasing and it effects our society in different ways . In your opinion , how can this situation be improved.

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this
modern world
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every person
want
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wants
to achieve their personal goals
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Owing to
this
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majority
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the majority
of learners are dropping out from educational institutions which becomes
reason
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the reason
a reason
of unemployment in some ways
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essay will intend to delve some reasons behind
this
vogue along with possible solutions in the subsequent clauses. To initiate
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there are plenty of reasons why unemployment is
esclating
increase in extent or intensity
escalating
because of dropping out from schools
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First
and foremost is that unskilled specialists as because of dropping out from educational
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
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they will not have to get higher
education
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Because of
this
fact
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they will not be able to get
better job vacancy
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a better job vacancy
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As a
remification
the act of branching out or dividing into branches
ramification
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they indulge in criminal activities owing to lack of money in order to achieve their personal goals
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Secondly
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they may afraid to speak in the front of an
audiance
a gathering of spectators or listeners at a (usually public) performance
audience
due to lack of confidence as dropping out from schools can become
reason
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the reason
of lack of knowledge
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On the solution side
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there are some possible solutions to tackle
this
problem that may be taken by government and people
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Firstly
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the high authorities ought to motivate to
children in the terms
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the children in terms
of
education
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For instance
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the regime should provide special bonuses and increment to students with the view to encouraging to them
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Such
as scholarships
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Subsequently
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parents had better
aware
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awareness
about children's
education
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They should encourage to their pupils for
education
and they teach them
value
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the value
of
education
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Through getting better
education
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educated
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they may better lifestyle
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To sum up
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although
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dropping out from educational institutions can cause job scarcity
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this
can be solved by government and individuals
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In my point of view
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education
plays an important role in children's life to getting
good job
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a good job
good jobs
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