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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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While ra
pidly t
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rapid
echnical development brings us convenience, it triggers detrimental effects in our daily lives at the same time. Some people hold the opinion that we ought not to use
technology
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 due to the fact that it makes
life
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 complex, I disagree with
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is points a
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this point
these points
nd will make an objective analysis in the following essay. On the one hand, the advance of modern
technology
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 makes our
life
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 more complex than in the past to some extents, especially for our jobs.
For instance
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, journalists just need to write reports several decades ago. Nowadays, they need to take photos and videos, even managing social me
dias b
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
ecause of the development of communication
technology
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. Actually, it cannot be denied that
technology
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 makes people’s
life
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 complex and elderly generation cannot accept it for a while.
However
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, it can be addressed by offering educational training and resources.
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, it is impossible to discard modern
technology
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 in our
life
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 because we have relied on too much. When we conduct cl
ass,
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classes
get in touch with our friends and do shopping, we have been accustomed to using In
ternet a
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the Internet
nd other modern
technology
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. Even though we can change our habits, it will pay for a great deal of costs. It ne
ed t
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needs
o be considered clearly whether it is worthwhile just to make so
-called simple
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a so-called simple life
life
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.
In addition
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, discarding
technology
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 may not lead to a simple
life
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 in some ways. It is imaginable that we have to take a long walk when we travelling to other places. It will be a meaningless waste of time and energy. In conclusion,
although
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 modern
technology
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 makes some people’s jo
bs c
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job
omplex, we still need to maintain our dependence of
technology
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 because it has been an indispensable part of our
life
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.

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