Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is true that
music
can be a great chance for a good relationship between different countries and cultures, like a bright. I totally agree with
this
topic. In
this
essay I will discuss about the importance of
music
for all of humanity and the reasons for my opinion. There are several reasons and examples how
music
affects relationships
among
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between
different people from different countries.
Firstly
,
music
is a language which people can talk about
social problem
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social problems
a social problem
or about reasons of happiness.
For example
, Michael Jackson has a
song
, which called “earth
song
’,
this
song
about environmental pollution. He has fans of the all earth. As well as, he has a
song
about love and millions of people know
this
song
regardless of nation.
Secondly
, in fact, we had a lot of singing
competitions
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competition
that influence the attitude of countries. Because of
this
, beautiful singing voices, and best songs,
good
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best
tune and meaningful text
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
for every person equally regardless of nation.
This
would explain why televised
music
competitions,
such
as “Eurovision” or “X-factor”. These programs very popular among different people.
Finally
, I have a lot of friends, who are fans of Korean brands. They
likes
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like
folk
music
of
this
nation, because of
this
they likes traditional foods, culture and their dress. I think, it is a good
possible
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possibility
, because it was influenced only by
music
. In conclusion, I think, that
music
plays an important role in human life and everyone
listen
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listens
to
music
in
different language
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different languages
a different language
.
Music
is
good opportunity
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a good opportunity
of
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for
humanity.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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