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some people are convinced that mature age employees are beneficial to a company. Others think that younger employees contribute more and hence are more beneficial to a company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In modern world of technology people think old enough people spending their entire
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 in working, today's we discussed about some people are convinced that mature
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 employees beneficial to a
company
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 other think younger
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 employees contribute more to the
company
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. In twenty years ago people become workalcholic inspite of spending
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 thier own
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 till mature
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 and gain knowledge vast variety of different kind of skill , technical support as well as technology
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 employers are most convienced with their ex employee about thier
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 and pay high wages of salaries,
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 recruiter think new younger talent for their specific specialization on that domine,it will take
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 to grab them knowledge about product and service , development skill and technical fact,In my opinion younger employee have to contributed more hard
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 , struggle to achieve the success with the
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 younger need some equivalent knowledge study structure about roles and responsibilities .
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 make them reliable diversity rather than staff
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 are beneficial support
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 help the organisation to grow professionally managed by empowerment employer
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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