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STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE SO THAT THEY CAN PASS EXAMS, AND SKILLS SUCH AS COOKING OR DRESSING SHOULD NOT BE TAUGHT. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE/DISAGREE

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Many believe that educational systems in schools should be focused on the main sector of academic knowledge for getting the huge amount of results to passing exams while the practical skills as well as craftsmanship or sewing should not be taught at the
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