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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should be more suspicious of their benefits?

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Computer
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 is one of the most advanced
technology
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 which can be used in almost every sector of our day to day
life
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.
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, people are getting more engaged in computerized systems. In
future
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 the
computer
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 can be used in multiple sectors
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 as robotics and space
technology
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Computer
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The computer
A computer
 is not only used in educational
,
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office, hospitals, but
also
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 in the war and criminology purpose which can be threatening in
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future
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the future
. In
future
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computer
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 is going to be used in mass areas which is going to be almost 30k faster than today. Artificial intelligence is one of the most updated version of computerized
system
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.
Moreover
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 the automated robotic
system
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,
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,
space
technology
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 of
computer
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 is going to lead the
technology
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. Building
,
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,
highways
,
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vehicles, machines and medical
science
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 are
also
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 going under the network of
computer
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. People will utilize
computer
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technology
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 in the data analytics
system
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 which might bring a revolutionary change in information systems. Medical
science
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 is going to be affected by computerized
system
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 as well. Upgraded version of
computer
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system
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 going to help doctors in terms of medical
science
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 and different invention in
future
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 medical
science
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. DNA,
finger print
a print made by an impression of the ridges in the skin of a finger; often used for biometric identification in criminal investigations
fingerprint
 testing, detection
system
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 is
also
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 getting a new face in the near
future
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 with the help of
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computer
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a computer
.
This
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 habituation in
computer
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brings
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will bring
 a lot of blessing in the near
future
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,
although
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 there is always a dark side of every possible tool which can fetch advantage. The benefits of
computer
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 cannot be denied in any way, even though some people use the advantage of computers in many awful purposes. The
life
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 of people is going to be very dynamic in the
future
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 that the back dated
technology
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 will not be sufficient for their
life
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. For every advancement of
life
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computer
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system
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 should be there and the evil sides of using
computer
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 need to be ignored. In conclusion
,
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it can be said that there is a lot of malpractice of an upgraded version of
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computer
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the computer system
a computer system
system
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 but the supremacy of
computer
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 cannot be refused. People should always look forward to the advancement of scheme ignoring the disadvantages.
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 the remedy
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for
get
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getting
 rid of the drawbacks needs to identified if possible. So it is very much clear that the dependence on
computer
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 is a great thing.
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