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the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Fashion concerned peoples mostly youngsters are the main reason to prefer online shopping over in-site shopping. The day is not so far when the increasing popularity of online shopping will tends to close traditional shops in towns and cities.
This
 essay will argue why online shopping is necessary despite it may
leads
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lead
 to close all shops. Most traditional Shops owners in towns and cities are
concern
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concerned
 about their future over increasingly growing e-shops. E-browsing has varieties of options including: different
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
, size, discounts and periodic offers, not only
this it
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this, it
 has options for gift wrap for your special ones.
For Instance
last
 week during a window shopping,
cost
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the cost
 of a T-shirt of a well-known brand is much costlier than that available in e-shop. Customer relations and quick response to your queries are few examples which make them more popular. These few instances have made many to opt online shopping which makes them more popular and lends to close many shops. Despite the minor risk of cost associated with
tradition
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traditional
 shopping, the idea behind closing shops in towns and cities is preposterous.
In
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On
-site shops gives you
flexibility
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the flexibility
 of bargaining and self-satisfaction towards quality.
For
example there
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example, there
 may be a quality difference when you purchase any stuff like cloths –online due to edited pictures of
product
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the product
. Overall, the idea behind closing shops are unnecessary.
This
 essay argued that why there is a growth in online shopping over traditional shopping which tends to
closing
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the closing
 of most in-site shops. In my opinion, online shopping is an imperative
that is
 entirely justified despite the small risk associated with quality.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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