The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart illustrates, the ratio of men, women and children who consumed five proportions of fruits and vegetables every day in these 8 years between 2001 and 2008 in the United Kingdom.
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that the highest percentage of all the people was women.
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adolescents constantly remained the lowest proportion of eating healthy fruits and vegetables. In 2001, ladies have eaten 22% of the vegetables and fruits. After
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five years (2006) the figure
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females
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increased and reached to peak level which was
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about 35
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.
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and teenagers, the percentage remained stable in 2001, 2002 and 2003. For the first three
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ratio was approximately 13%
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the young age people were about 18%. Male consumption raised in 2006 to 28% and it
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remained stable in 2007 but in 2008 it showed a minor decrease which was almost 27%. Meanwhile, the growth of
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in children
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25% in 2007 but after
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year it dropped to 25%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • nutritional intake
  • health-conscious
  • percentages
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • public health initiatives
  • recommended intake
  • demographic differences
  • graphical analysis
  • upward/downward trend
  • health implications
  • national averages
  • gender disparities
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