The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart illustrates, the ratio of men, women and children who consumed five proportions of fruits and vegetables every day in these 8 years between 2001 and 2008 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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that the highest percentage of all the people was women. Change the verb form
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the
adolescents constantly remained the lowest proportion of eating healthy fruits and vegetables.
In 2001, ladies have eaten 22% of the vegetables and fruits. After Correct article usage
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five years (2006) the figure Correct article usage
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females Correct article usage
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have
increased and reached to peak level which was Change the verb form
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round
about 35 Correct your spelling
around
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per cent
Males
and teenagers, the percentage remained stable in 2001, 2002 and 2003. For the first three Change preposition
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adult’s
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the young age people were about 18%. Male consumption raised in 2006 to 28% and it also
remained stable in 2007 but in 2008 it showed a minor decrease which was almost 27%. Meanwhile, the growth of figure
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25% in 2007 but after Change preposition
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