Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A growing number of educational organizations have converted to
coeducation
from the gender separation academy. Some people believe that separating
education
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of
boys
and
girls
is better
while
others think that
coeducation
is much more beneficial.
This
essay will discuss why separate education has good merit but
coeducation
is ultimately superior.
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sex
academy is a place where
boys
and
girls
can separately do review without any hesitation.
Single
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sex
institute reduces the distraction of students from the bad things and can give more attention to study.
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, A boy cannot meet with a girl so
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bad emotional things can not accumulate within him. It is
also
true for the
girls
. So
single
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single-sex
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sex
school
gives
good
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a good
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educational environment for research.
Conversely
, most of the
school
is converting their educational organization to
coeducation
from
single
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single-sex
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sex
school
. In the coeducational organization
boys
and
girls
can meet and even
seat
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sit
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together. In response to
this
system ,
boys
and
girls
can mutually share their mental
need
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needs
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and grow up with good Personalities. So in the future , when students attend university, students can easily mix with the opposite
sex
from multicultural
country
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countries
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. One research says ,
for example
,
more
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that more
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than 85%
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growth and personality can be developed through mixed schools. It goes without saying that
mix
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or
coeducation
based
school
is the best system for study. With the introduction of
coeducational
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the coeducational
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scheme ,
single
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single-sex
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sex
school
is being challenged.
This
essay discussed why
single
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single-sex
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sex
institute is good for study but why
coeducation
based institute is more creditable. In my opinion,
boys
and
girls
can earn more useful
thing
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things
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from the
school
which are coeducational based.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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