You are studying english at a private language school attended by many international students. you are planning for a surprise party who has been feeling particularly sick and homesick. write to another classmate and invited him or her to the party. In your letter- - explain the reasons for the party - give the date and time of the party - suggest what the classmates could bring to the party

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Dear Sam, Hope you are doing well and are in good spirits. I am writing

this

letter to invite you

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a surprise party that I am planning for our special friend

Neil

who has been extremely feeling sick and homesick. You will be surprised to know that

Neil

's birthday is in the coming days and I want to make it special for

Neil

because he found himself alone in

this

country and misses her parents badly. I want to do something to change his mood and try to bring a smile to his face. To celebrate his birthday, we will meet at

Neil

's house at

11o'clock

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11 o'clock

in the morning on 25th of the November.

Neil

has no idea about

this

party and it will be

surprise

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gift for him. We will make

this

party memorable by enjoying every second with

Neil

. Sam, I know you are a good baker and I want you to bake a cake to feel

him

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better. Others can bring pasta, doughnuts and soft drinks from their home. I will bring decorative items to decorate his house. I will be glad if you accept my invitation. I am eagerly waiting to see you soon! Warm Regards, Sushi.

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task achievement

Ensure consistency in using pronouns (e.g., switch 'her parents' to 'his parents' to match 'Neil').

coherence cohesion

Avoid using phrases that can cause ambiguity (e.g., 'Neil has no idea about this party and it will be surprise gift for him').

task achievement

The letter's purpose is clearly conveyed, with a kind and inviting tone, fulfilling the task requirement well.

coherence cohesion

Uses an appropriate greeting and closing for a letter invitation, which supports clarity.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

202 words

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