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You have organized 90th birthday of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager to provide the feedback. In your letter you should tell When the party was Why it was successful Thank for a staff member who was really helpful

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express some positive reviews about the service offered by your team for my father-in-law’s 90th birthday party organized at your Hotel Park in Chennai. The function happened
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 Sunday, 25th March in the Banquet Hall at 6pm. As the hotel already had the event management team in place, I was lucky enough to inform them
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 the requirements. The party was successful because your employees handled the guests welcoming, stage decorations, photography, game shows like puzzles, quizzes, magic shows, paint tattooing especially for children, music and catering services in a phenomenal way. Without your associates, it would not have been successful and memorable as they stretched their support wherever possible. Needless to say, I would like to thank each and every staff member for their strenuous hard work and efforts that they have delivered to make the party a grand success. Please pass on my feedback to them and keep up the momentum for the excellent customer service. I look forward to
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 many more events with you. Yours faithfully, Dimple Jay

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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