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In Britain, when someone’s gets old, they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Some times the government has to pay for this care Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It’s the norm nowadays in England to get geriatrics together into buildings which are designed especially for them, provided
with
Suggestion
by
 Trained medical staff along with essentials and medications. The fees for
such
 services are sometimes paid by the government while in other times the elderly peoples’ families afford them. I believe that the government should be responsible for covering these kinds of care houses. On the one hand, most of the elderly people who get to continue the rest of their lives inside these buildings are suffering from chronic diseases like Alzheimer’s or Parkinson’s disease which negatively affect their mental activity to an extent that they would forget their names or even their families.
Also
, some would get lost and become homeless. In these cases the government would have no choice but to pay for their accommodation in these care places.
On the other hand
, some families do not have enough money to spend on their old peoples’ needs, that’s why they prefer sending them to places other than hospitals where they could receive medical treatment but without paying much money. Governmental health units would be a perfect choice
then
. As the official authorities have already taken these cases into consideration by placing taxes on citizens ‘ salaries through their work life, so that when they get old and retire, they would be able to join geriatrics homes, enjoying their time with others of the same age
besides
 having nurses to look after them. To conclude, I think the official authorities should thoroughly take the lead on
this
 issue, providing
old
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older
 people with medically equipped places to peacefully continue their lives,
in addition
 to
trained
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training
 staff to take care of them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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