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it is better to go out for a live performances ( show or concert ) than stay at home watching Tv or using the computer to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
stay
stay the same; remain in a certain state
Stay
 at
home
Use synonyms
 and using
mobile phone
Suggestion
a mobile phone
,
Accept space
,
spend
time
Use synonyms
 on social media
,
Accept space
,
youtube more
Accept comma addition
YouTube, more
YouTube more
 popular than enjoy live performance.
in
Suggestion
In
 my opinion
,
Accept space
,
even though individuals passionate it.
go
Suggestion
Go
 out and
enjoying
Suggestion
enjoy
live peroformans
Suggestion
a live performance
live performance
live performances
such
Linking Words
 as
shows concert
Accept comma addition
shows, concert
 which
able
Suggestion
ability
 to connect people
to gether
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
, would enhance relationships.
Body paragraph 1
most of individuals
Suggestion
Most individuals
Most of individuals
 are trying to stay at
home
Use synonyms
for
Suggestion
to
 enjoy.
there
Suggestion
There
 is a
possibale
capable of happening or existing
possible
possibly
explantion
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanation
,
Accept space
,
it
it is
it's
primarlly
for the most part
primarily
 because people have no
time
Use synonyms
,
Accept space
,
they busy with their works.
but
Suggestion
But
 individuals who have
practis
a customary way of operation or behavior
practiced
 to go out and enjoy in
holydays
leisure time away from work devoted to rest or pleasure
holidays
,
Accept space
,
free times, that have own fait fulness
Body paragraph 2
enjoying
Suggestion
Enjoying
 live
perofoance
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
 that
have
Suggestion
has
 pros and cons.
an
Suggestion
An
 advantage of
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 people engage with
sosity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.
at
Suggestion
At
same
Suggestion
the same time
time
Use synonyms
 it makes opportunities to enhance the social relationship in additional to increase social bonds.
Body paragraph 3
by
Suggestion
By
 going out and enjoying
live
Suggestion
life
 people would understand how to adept the situations and they learn some
causese
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
causes
courses
bhind
further back than; at the back of; at the far side of
behind
 the
un ethical
not conforming to approved standards of social or professional behavior
unethical
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
which
Suggestion
Which
 are
infulance
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influenced
 to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
more valubale person
Suggestion
a more valuable person
more valuable person
 their
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 /
nation
Suggestion
nation?
Body paragraph 4
most of individuals
Suggestion
Most individuals
Most of individuals
 are trying to
saty
stay the same; remain in a certain state
stay
home
Use synonyms
 in their
lesiar
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
Use synonyms
,
Accept space
,
it has possible
resons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
such
Linking Words
 as
rulse
a principle or condition that customarily governs behavior
rules
race
 and regulations,
noize
Suggestion
Noize
,
Accept space
,
unnesosary
not necessary
unnecessary
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 are not
at
Suggestion
in
 their houses.
Conclusion
to
Suggestion
To
 conclude, enjoying life in out of the
home
Use synonyms
 is extensive for
peoples
Suggestion
people's
 relations
,
Accept space
,
expiriance
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experiences
 and social bonds.
spending
Suggestion
Spending
time
Use synonyms
 in social media
,
Accept space
,
computers that situation would enhance to make mechanical man. individual who have ability to balance both situation it will come in handy to be creative and valuable person

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