The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
There are two pie charts, the first shows the various usages of electricity by Australian
household
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households
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and the
second
one shows the
emissions
of greenhouse gas. It can be noticed that the major consumption of
energy
goes to heating and water heating ( 42% and 30% respectively). Other appliances account for 15% of the total
energy
consumption. The least
energy
is used for cooling (2%) and lighting (4%). There is 7% consumed by refrigeration which is slightly more than that of cooling and lighting combined.
It is clear that
more than half of the greenhouse gas
emissions
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are
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produced by only two categories, water heating ( 32% ) and other appliances (28%). The emission generated by Heating and refrigeration is almost
euqal
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equal
(15%). Cooling and lighting
hasThe
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has the
has
lowest gas
emissions
( 3% and 8% respectively ) In summary, The
emissions
that were produced
was
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were
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almost
the
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apply
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double
of
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the
energy
used in the various fields, except for heating and water heating .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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