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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
A clean body
yeilds
be the cause or source of
yields
 a clear mind, but
this
 phrase just applies to oneself. Why
this
 cannot be followed for our surroundings?
This
 essay will provide my opinion on
importance
Suggestion
the importance
 of harmony and hygiene in
home
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the home
 and office. In my country it is said that an abode is a temple and main necessity is to keep a temple spot-free clean. The purpose of
this
 teaching explains that we should regularly clean our
house
.
Moreover
, maximum time is spent
in
Suggestion
at
home
 doing chores, carrying out daily routine and sleeping. A dirty
house
 festers many rodents, pest as well as diseases, which can be life-
threatning
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
.
Also
, if everything is kept in
specific manner
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a specific manner
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 anyone living
in
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at
home
 can find their respective and common things easily.
Thus
, it is called good practice to maintain
house
 cleaning habits for better living conditions. Apart from time spend at
home
, we spend approximately 7 to 14 hours at work. Regardless of job position, every person has personal workspace which they need to tend in their own way. It is in human nature to forget things, after placing it. The best way to overcome
this
 problem is to organize. A disorganized desk or workplace may lead to loss of important documents or object.
Such
 behaviour is frowned upon in many companies. In
medical field
Suggestion
the medical field
, it is mandatory to sterilize every equipment and protective gear in order to work with patients. So, maintenance and
cleaniness
the habit of keeping free of superficial imperfections
cleanliness
 go hand-in-hand when it comes to occupation.
This
 essay discussed the requirement of
organization
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the organization
 and hygiene in
house
 and job place. I believe that well prepared is half done,
so to keep running
Suggestion
so keep running
 things
smoothly we
Accept comma addition
smoothly, we
 should maintain
cleaniness
the habit of keeping free of superficial imperfections
cleanliness
 and organize our things properly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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