Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day.What is your opinion about this?
In
this
era of globalization, exercise
and yoga
is very useful for our health
. Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise
time
during the day
and than
they easily fell better. subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
This
essay is in agreement to the given statement and shall discuss reasons
for my support before presenting logical conclusion.
Lately, in all Suggestion
the reasons
countries people
doing Accept comma addition
countries, people
yoga
and exercise
because they believe that health
is most important in our life because sometimes some people have lots of money but
they Accept comma addition
money, but
can’t
have good health
and they always ill than, they can’t
use their money to buy cars, homes, and mobile phones etc. These days, companies should provide exercise
time
during the day
because they also
fill stress and they are always doing their work
in companies than, companies should provide some exercise
time
than, they also
feel relax
and they are always Suggestion
relaxed
presenting
good works because their companies Suggestion
present
presented
are provide gym
and garden so, all employees are doing Suggestion
are providing a gym
are providing gym
yoga
and exercise
in their companies. For example
, in reliance company
, they provide gym facilities because companies manager believe
that if all workers are Suggestion
believes
healthy
than Suggestion
healthier
more healthy
company
easily complete their goals.
Moreover
, sometimes workers are not healthy and they can’t
come in the company
than
, other workers subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
can’t
complete work
because some workers are Ill. Than, company
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the company
a company
companies
can’t
reach their goals. Appropriately, if companies should provide some exercise
time
during the day than, all
employees feel better because companies take care their workers. So, all companies should provide employees with Suggestion
day, then all
day then, all
exercise
time
during the day than
, workers are easily Accept comma addition
day, then
day then
reduce
their stress level and they feel better.
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reduced
However
, some companies suggest that, provide exercise
time
is a weast
of working spend thoughtlessly; throw away
waste
time
because some time
some company
have lots of work
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work, therefore
therefore
, their workers are doing exercises in garden
and gym than, Suggestion
a garden
the garden
company
can’t
complete work
. Sometimes provide exercise
time
is a very bad for companies future.
To conclude, provide exercise
time
during the day
is a
important for Suggestion
an
workers
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workers'
worker
health
and it’s also
useful for companies
manager because they Suggestion
company
company's
also doing
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are also doing
also do
yoga
and other exercises. After, exercise
workers fell
better and they are complete their mat together and make felt-like
felt
work
in one or two hours so, it’s
Suggestion
hours, so it’s
also
profitable for company
.Suggestion
the company
companies
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