There is no need to go out to see live performance (concert...) because it is better to see them on the TV or Computer screen. Do you agree or disagree

An emerging trend which has generated a widespread phenomenon in the entertainment field is watching home
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. I am inclined to believe that watching
movies
on screens is much better than coming to the social cinema. Not only will watching
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at home help us to save our precious time, but it can
also
be a private area to enjoy TV series. To look at the entertainment aspect, the most important factor to consider is the daily form of recreation. If a person has
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her private applications or websites to relax against some pillows
while
watching the
movies
, it will be one of the best
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for them to save an amount of huge money
instead
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going
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to the social cinema.
Such
a form of entertainment,
moreover
, will create a private place for us to watch wonderful
movies
without irritating
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others intensely. The more people are around, the more bad emotional feelings we will get. It is true that we always find confidence and truly
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whenever we can gather with friends or family members, which can be destroyed
while
watching in the social cinema with strangers. In order to avoid
this
situation, all we need to do is self-quarantine, find a great
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show and relax. With that being said, everything always has its defective sides and it is pretty true on home-
movie
watching. What really makes
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truly boring
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the film is
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distraction. Assuming a person is watching his favourite
movie
, he might be momentarily distracted by social media platforms
such
as Facebook, Instagram or even the notification of messages which is pretty unpleasant. Watching
movies
in our private area can affect negatively
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our routine, we might
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immersed in blockbuster
movies
or
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series and
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lazy.
Moreover
, Blue light from computer screens will cause some contemporary symptoms
such
as eye strain,
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vision or headache. In conclusion, watching
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movie
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is on the rise, and watching
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on
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trend brings both advantages and disadvantages to
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and
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others. Moderation is the key to
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balance and
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these problems effectively.
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