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WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are relying
in
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on
convenient
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convenience
 foods as their regular meals due to their daily busy schedule. I think the drawbacks of
this
 outweigh the benefits because fast
food
 is detrimental to
individual’s health
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an individual’s health
the individual’s health
. Admittedly, there are several benefits of eating ready meals. One of these is that convenient foods help people to save time in their busy schedule, simply because they do not need to spend more time to prepare their foods.
For instance
, people will just drop by in any fast
food
 or
convenient
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convenience
 store and buy
meal
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a meal
 that they wants and re-heat
this
 once they reach home and eat. Whereas home cook meal will consume more time in which many busy people avoided.
Furthermore
, ready meals are affordable and lots of different cuisines to choose from. Home cook meals are
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 expensive because of fresh meats and vegetables.
Thus
, cooking varieties of foods to eat are burden for people.
However
, with the existence of ready meals in different types people can now buy without breaking their banks.
For example
, many groceries and
convenient
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convenience
 stores are now have ready to eat meals in affordable
price
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price, such
such
 as Burger and fries, Chicken with rice that comes
in
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with
 a pretty cheap price. Despite these benefits, I believe that
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
 of ready meals for many individuals in
this
 fast
pace
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paced
 modern life outweigh the advantages. One of these is that it can cause health issue in the long run. Because basically fast
food
 is unhealthy
meals it
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meals, it
 contains
large amount
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a large amount
large amounts
 of preservatives, saturated fats, salt and sugar.
Therefore
, consuming convenient
food
 on
regular basis
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a regular basis
 might result
to
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in
 obesity.
In addition
, eating fast
food
 on
daily basis
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a daily basis
 can lead to serious illnesses
such
 as diabetes and kidney failure. To illustrate
this
, a recent report in Health and Care weekly magazine showed that over 69% of regular fast
food
 consumers have overweight problem and have obesity-related illness
such
 as diabetes and kidney problem. In conclusion: even though fast
food
 has many benefits for many individuals in
this
 modern busy world. I think that convenient meals are harmful
for
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to
 people’s health because it can lead to serious illnesses.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast pace
  • turning towards
  • main meals
  • advantages
  • outweigh
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide variety
  • affordable prices
  • on-the-go
  • health risks
  • lack of nutritional value
  • obesity
  • negative impact
  • environment
  • opinion
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