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Individuals should take care of the environment or is it the government’s responsibility Discus both side and give your opinion

#individuals #care #environment #government’s #responsibility #discus #side
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The
environment
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 plays vital
role
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 in
individuals
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individual's
individual
 life. But some believe individuals are more important in taking care of the
environment
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, others think governments should be
major responsible
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the major responsible
to
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for
 it. In my opinion, both the individuals and
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government play indispensable
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government play indispensable roles
role
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 in the environmental protection, as we are all living in the same world.
Firstly
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, Pollution is the major problems impacting on
world
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the world
 and each individual are facing it and are normally created by big enterprise, industries and factories. It is only the governments have the power or ability to restrict or force them to control pollutions in a reasonable measurement.
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, governments have a plenty of funds, resources and ability to cope with these serious environmental incidents.
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, the individuals' impact on the environments should not be neglected, because our behaviours are seriously
impact
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impacting
 on environments.
For example
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, use of plastic, vehicles that emits more smoke
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 to
this
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, if we are often taking public transport to go to work
instead
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 of driving
private car
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a private car
private cars
, it not only improves the traffic conditions in cities, but
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 reduces the carbon dioxide
emission
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emitted
. Both individuals and
government
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 have to take part in keeping
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environment
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the environment
 clean by avoiding plastic usage
also
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 they have to come across
planting
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plant
 more
trees whereas
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trees, whereas
 in future both
government
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 and individuals have to suffer from lack of carbon dioxide. In my opinion, it is the
government
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 duty to improve as
well protect our
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well as protect our
 living
environment
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, I
also
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 believe everyone on the earth does enjoy the equal
role
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.
Therefore
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, the individual and the
government
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 are both play vital
role
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 in environmental protection.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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