The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart represents the use of
energy
by an average Australian household and
emission
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the emission
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of
greenhouse
gas
from the use of
energy
respectively. An average Australian household uses the highest amount of
energy
(42%) for heating
while
water heating consumes 30% of
energy
. Refrigeration, lighting, and cooling consume 7%, 4% and 2% of
energy
.
Thus
cooling consumes the least amount of
energy
and the other appliances consume 15% of
energy
. Every
energy
used caused the emission of
greenhouse
gas
.
According to
the
second
chart, refrigeration and lighting contribute 14% and 8% of
greenhouse
gas
even though they consume only 7% and 4% of
energy
. Water heating adds 32% of the total
greenhouse
gas
emissions
while
heating adds
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15% of the emissions.
While
other appliances used only 15% of the
energy
they produced 28% of the total
greenhouse
gas
emissions.
Thus
, water heating contributes to the highest
greenhouse
gas
while
lighting shares the lowest.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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