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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
#show #village #stockefort
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The maps illustrate the growth of the
village
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 of Stokeford
in
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 1930 and 2010.
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, in the past, there were some houses in the middle
village
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, and there was a large house in the gardens
area
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 near a primary school in the east, and to the northeast of
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village
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the village
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, there was a bridge. To the west of
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village
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the village
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, there were two shops,
a
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post office, and to the north and south of
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village
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the village
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, there were two farmland areas;
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, there was a long river from south to north.
Over development
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, there are many changes
such
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 as retirement
home
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homes
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, but bridge
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area
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areas
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, river stoke, houses, primary
school
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schools
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 and post office areas remain the same with changes in size. In 2010, a lot of houses are built around the
village
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. To the east of
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village
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the village
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,
primary
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the primary
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 school
area
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 is renovated,
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besides
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and besides
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 gardens
area
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also
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 replaced by
retirement
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the retirement
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 home
area
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, and to the west of
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village
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, two shops are demolished.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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