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the map below show village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010

the map below show village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010
#show #village #stokeford
The maps illustrate the growth of the
village
 of Stokeford
in
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 1930 and 2010.
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, in the past, there were some houses in the middle
town
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of town
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, and there was a large house in the garden section near a primary school in the east, and to the northeast of
village
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the village
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, there was a bridge. To the west of
village
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the village
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, there were two shops,
a
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and a
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post office, and to the north and south of
township
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the township
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, there were two farmland areas;
in addition
, there was a long river from south to north.
Over development
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, there are many changes
such
 as retirement
home
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homes
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, but bridge section, river stoke, houses, primary
school
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schools
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 and post office areas remain the same with changes in size. In 2010, a lot of houses are built around the
village
. To the east of town,
primary
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the primary
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 school area is renovated,
besides
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and besides
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gardens
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the gardens
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 area is
also
 replaced by
retirement
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a retirement
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 home section, and to the west of
village
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the village
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, two shops are demolished.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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